Second Cut Feedback

The overall feedback suggested an overall improvement which is what we were obviously hoping for with it being a second draft. 

From our first draft feedback, we got told that the trailer could benefit from a change in music to create more of a dynamic within the trailer. However, when we showed the second draft where there was a change in music, we received feedback that the transition was not subtle enough and they said it felt like it revealed who committed the ‘crime’. Due to this feedback, our next draft of the  trailer will have a smoother transition of music and maybe a less dramatic drop son that no indication to who did it is revealed. 

Now we've added in text between the footage to add suspense an give the audience questions to think about, although they wont get the answers until they watch the film, the main part of feedback we received from this was that its liked and it looks good but the falling letters onto the screen doesn't really fit with the rest ion the trailer. To improve this for the next draft, we will re-evaluate what font we use to make sure it is gripping.

Another piece of feedback we received from our second draft was that the story line is still too clear. although the audience don't actually know who did it, they can guess as to what is going on. Also, they suggested that something more exciting and engaging happens that half implies what does happen but doesn't actually reveal the full ending so that it captures the audiences attention more. This presents us with a decision of whether we want to film new footage and edit it in or take out footage to take away some fluidity. 

Since the first draft, the conventions and the order does represent a trailer now more than it did before but the story is still a bit too fluid. One piece of feedback suggested that because of the voice overs, that the characters maybe have been introduced too much and that doesn't help when it comes to the storyline as it answers too many questions so the audience are able to follow although they shouldn't be able to this much. This will be discussed further, but we think the best solution will be to remove these voice overs. 

One other main piece of feedback we received, was the fact that in the scene where two characters are in the park, the audio is really bad because of the windy weather which therefore makes it hard to hear what the characters are saying. For a resolution, the best answer will be to complete re-film this section and possibly change the location so that sound wont be a problem.

From the re-ordering of the whole trailer and the jumbling up of scenes, we put the title after the release date. Feedback we gained from this suggested that the title not only needs to be before the release date, but it also needs to be seen a lot earlier in the trailer. 

Although we have the voice overs and we have non-diegetic music, it was put forward as a suggestion that we could add in sound effects to create more tension and dramatic effect for the audience to stay engaged. The feedback also implied that the trailer needed more ‘umph’ .

Overall, we are pleased with the feedback we have been given as it will help better the trailer and it also gets us being more creative with the footage we have. It allows us to reflect on our work and then make the improvements. The feedback we have received isn't going to be a challenge as its all relatively simple as we know exactly what we have to do now to improve it all.